VIDEO FORMATS

As promised, this is how I would lay out a video script for the same scenario as last week’s radio play. I’ve taken the part where the Green Giant chooses Englebert, the third under trainee front doorstep polisher at King Charming’s Palace to lead the happy peasants against their royal masters. He’s a cute friendly fellow five and a half short of a six pack.

You may notice that there are no descriptions as such, simply what you see and what is said. I have battled with the ‘show don’t tell’ as a result after writing hundreds of scripts. Writing novels is so very different and I’ve still got a lot to learn.

THE BOOK

“Come,” he commanded, “you will lead your people out of bondage. You will liberate their ills. You will speak for all the downtrodden in Charmingdon.”

“Me!” squeaked the man gazing into the Green Giant’s face. “Well, aw right, if yer want me to. I’ve always done as I’m told.”

The Giant pulled the man to his feet and led him to the front, amid cheers, hand clapping and stamping feet. If there were some peasants who looked a little startled by the Giant’s choice, he failed to notice.

“Here is your leader,” he boomed, waving the man’s arms in the air for him. “Greet your Comrade in Charge.” A renewed burst of cheering ensued and under the commotion the Giant bent to ask his name.

“Englebert, sir,” he replied bowing low.

“No!” exclaimed the Giant, “you don’t make obeisance to me, we are all brothers together, one and the same. We share everything, we are all equal.”

“Ooh,” replied Englebert, “can I have this nice coat then?” he fingered the green jacket.

“No, you bloody well can’t,” snapped the august Party emissary, “and get your filthy paws off it, you’re making it all dirty. You can bloody well earn it like I had to.” He slapped away Englebert’s hand and turned to smile at the audience afraid of what they might think of his behaviour.

“Shame,” sighed Englebert, “it’s such a pretty green.”

The Giant turned back to the crowd and held aloft an imperious hand. The peasants subsided and were quiet.

“Now is the time,” he announced, “for your chosen brother to address you all. I give you Comrade Englebert.”

“I don’t know where they all live,” complained Englebert.

THE VIDEO SCRIPT

 UNHAPPILY EVER AFTER  –  VIDEO SCRIPT

SCENE: PEASANTS MEETING IN HALL
 SHOT                             VIDEO                                             AUDIO
1. CU OF GREEN GIANT PULL BACK AS HE WALKS DOWN FROM STAGE
2. REVERSE ANGLE FROM ENGELBERT’S POINT OF VIEW, SHOW GG GETTING LARGER AND MORE THREATENING WITH DOMINANT SHOT.
3. GREEN GIANT PAUSES, LOOKS AROUND FOCUSES ON ENGLEBERT GG Come! you will lead your people out of bondage. You will liberate their ills. You will speak for all the downtrodden in Charmingdon.
4. CUT TO CROWD LOOKING VERY PUZZLED. SOME LEAN AND WHISPER TO NEIGHBOURS SFX CROWD: MUTTERING
5. CU OF ENGLEBERT LOOKING VERY WORRIED ENG:  Me!
6. CUT TO CU GREEN GIANT LEANING OVER HIM INTENSE EXPRESSION GG: YES
7. GG PUTS OUT HAND AND GRASPS ENG BY THE BACK OF HIS JACKET.
8. CUT TO 2 SHOT ENG CRINGING ENG: Well, aw right, if yer want me to. I’ve always done as I’m told.
9. GG HAULS ENG FROM STOOL AND FROGMARCHES HIM TO STAGE
10. CUTAWAYS TO SHOW CROWD LOOKING APPALLED ODD CALLS: Go for it Englebert

See how important you’ve become

Go man go!

11. PAN ROUND CROWD WHO BEGIN TO STAMP AND CATCALL AND WHISTLE. You be famous now!

Yeah you lead us in this …

12. GG TURNS ENG TO FACE THE CROWD STILL HAS A FIRM HOLD ON HIM
13. QUICK SHOT OF ENG LOOKING TOTALLY BEMUSED. HE DUCKS DOWN AS IF TO RETURN TO SEAT. GG: (Hisses) Oh no you don’t!
14. SHOT FROM REAR OF HALL AS GG ADDRESSES THEM – ENG IS TRYING TO DUCK DOWN BEHIND HIM GG: Here is your leader
15. GG TURNS ROUND DRAGS HIM FORWARD AND HOLDS UP HIS ARM
16. CUT OR PAN TO CROWD CHEERING WILDLY, SEVERAL SNIGGERING
17. TWO SHOT OF GG WHISPERING TO ENG GG: What is your name?

 

18. ENG BOWS LOW TO THE GG ENG: Englebert, Sir.
19. GG GRABS HIM AND HAULS HIM UPRIGHT GG: (LOUDLY) No! You don’t make obeisance to me, we are all brothers together, one and the same. We share everything, we are all equal.
20. ENG HUGE SMILE REACHES OUT AND FINGERS GG’S GREEN COAT ENG: Ooh, can I have this nice coat then?
21. CU GG LOOKS DISGUSTED
22. SIDE SHOT AS GG ANGLES AWAY FROM THE AUDIENCE AND BRUTALLY SLAPS ENG’S HAND OFF HIS COAT. GG: No, you bloody well can’t, and get your filthy paws off it, you’re making it all dirty. You can bloody well earn it like I had to.
23. 2 SHOT OF CROWD AS THEY PEER TO SEE WHAT’S GOING ON
24. CU ENG LOOKS SAD ENG: Shame. It’s such a pretty green
25. GG TURNS TO AUDIENCE AND SMILES BEATIFICALLY HOLDS HAND UP FOR QUIET SFX: FACE DOWN CROWD
26. CU GG Now is the time for your chosen brother to address you all. I give you Comrade Englebert.
27. CU ENG LOOKING TOTALLY MISERABLE TURNS TO ADDRESS GG ENG:  I don’t know where they all live

You must know by now how ‘untechie’ I am so the columns are not the correct width, but I fiddled for ages and this is the best I can do.  There would be a column for timing if you were shooting a documentary that had been pr-scripted as you work to seconds in broadcast, but for a drama you would have a good idea about length from rehearsals.

For interest, an average 46 minute script (that would air for an hour allowing for add breaks) could be easily 10 thousand words.

Just in case you would like to read more, Unhappily Ever After can be found here.

http://www.amazon.com/dp/B01DPVB4M8

UAE WITHOUT BORDERS

I have news to share but that will have to be next week, this is quite long enough!

Take care

Lucinda

 

 

 

 

 

 

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